Topic: You are going to give a surprise party to your best friend. Explain all the things you will need to do to make it a success.

 

If I’m going to give a surprise part to my best friend, first of all I would tell everybody in our class that it’s her birthday and warn them to not discuss about it so that she won’t notice. If she says it’s her birthday by herself, people would have to pretend that they don’t care to make the party a success.

When it gets to lunch time, I would remind people to don’t eat so much because we are going to eat a lot at my best friend’s surprise part. We will come to our classroom during the lunch time with our teacher’s permission. We have to hold the party during the lunch time because we have lessons after lunchtime and we can’t delay them.

After that, my classmates and I would decorate our classroom with all the balloons and other decorations. The most important thing that I would have to do is to make a simple cake with cookies prepared. To finish decorating, it would take about 20mins and there will be 25mins left. In that left time, one of our classmates will go get my best friend and tell her that our teacher wants to see her so that she would trust it.

When she comes in to the classroom, the lights have to be off and everybody shouts! ‘Happy birthday!’ I will hold the cookie cake for her and she blows the candles. That moment, we have to sing the happy birthday song!

At last, we can enjoy the party! Wee!

 

Some points that I have to correct/add:

  

-Write a topic sentence to tell what I’m going to write about in each paragraph.

-add good word choice.

 

Things that I did good:

 

-No spelling and grammar mistakes

-Sentence structure was good.